“So, You think you Have it Bad, Huh?”
(Hope you enjoy, and comment/critique as you wish)
You think you have it bad; that everything in your
life is collapsing around you; and that all that could possibly go wrong in your
life, did? Well, I’m here to make you eat those words! What is it that’s
so difficult about life as a human being, living free with no
restraints, when it’s the things supporting you that truly suffer? No, I’m not
your parent or legal guardian; look lower. I’m a stinking shoe.
My current master is a dedicated athlete, and
being a Nikes sneaker, I was fabricated to withstand much sweat, heat, and
pressure. Even though my other half doesn’t mind, what the boneheads who made
me, personally, didn’t consider is my emotions. This job is disgusting,
physical abuse is reflected by my scratches, dirt marks, or bruises and the
hours are all screwed up, depending on this guy’s weird schedule. He also
doesn’t shower often, which adds to the pungent musk I’m forced to absorb
already. And, just to top it all off—the perfect cherry for this unpleasant
sundae—have you ever had to support the weight of somebody with a pus-filled
hangnail jammed in your face? Yeah, I didn’t think so; hence, before you
complain about your life, consider the ones below you (literally) and be
thankful for how good you have it in—oh crap...he’s awake!
I feel sorry for that shoe. Well written. Good job, Carlos.
ReplyDeleteI thought shoes were our friends...pout, pout.
ReplyDeleteGood entry.
on the one hand, ugh. on the other hand, ugh. carlos, you were able to get me into that shoe! nice --
ReplyDeletehere goes the critique: Clearly, this shoe is frustrated and has been bottling it up for a long time. What else might he complain about? Where's the inner sole (sorry! I couldn't pass that up) of this shoe? Especially as you end on "he's awake" which means that the shoe feels he can only talk when his master is asleep or away. Anger but also desperation. I love the conversational tone. I could almost imagine this shoe at a local bar, telling the bartender about all his travails. PLay with the story a bit more. See what you more you can do.
Interesting use of personification of a sneaker. The idea of being force fed sweat and being worn ( double entendre) everyday and forced to stink after being close;y exposed to bodily fluids was creative. This rant evokes anxiety, frustration, annoyance and even provokes the intended disgust through the use of vivid imagery. The open ending does not only cause curiosity about the owner's reaction about the talking shoe, it almost evokes a desire to help as well.
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