Monday, October 29, 2012

Challenge 2-revisted



The Tale of my Three Ancestors
 (with apologies to JK Rowling’s “The Tale of the Three Brothers”) by Carlos Santaella re-told by elf

Once there were three brothers who lived on a parched vineyard in Andalucía.   When war erupted between their home country and the Freedom Land to the west, they enrolled in the army and traveled to a small island close to the enemy’s land.  They fought bravely for their country; however, when the war was over, and their country defeated, the three brothers attracted by the lush green vegetation and the women of copper skin and flowing raven tresses, stayed behind.

Intent on making it on the foreign yet familiar land, they set out to work the fields and offer their limited skills to the nearest plantation owner.  On their way, they encountered a hooded figure.  Goosebumps covered their arms and one brother still recalls how his nape felt as if a fork had been digging into it. Hesitantly, they paused to greet him when they realized it was none other than Death.  Death in a voice that reminded them of vacuous pipes and streaming water confessed he had been out searching for them. Their ability to remain alive was troubling him for their names had long been recorded in The Book of Fates.  According to the book, their demise had been set for a week ago. Cunning as Death can be, he feigned admiration for their feat and their ability to outsmart him, and offered each a reward of their own choosing.

The men, hesitantly at first, gathered around the hooded figure to name their prize. The oldest brother, Baldomero—a bold man given to enjoying the good life-- thought hard about his choice.  He needed something that he would enjoy and at the same time allow him a life of comfort and ease. He had once long ago worked at a cigar factory.  He remembered with nostalgia the pink smoke invading his nostrils and lingering on his clothes, his hair, his memory. Shrewdly convinced that vice sells, and often carries wealth, he asked that he be given a factory to produce his own line of cigars.  Death nodded and granted him his wish.

The second brother, Ramiro—a savvy, and ambitious man—decided that only through knowledge of science and medicine could he defeat Death so he asked for wisdom for him and his descendants.  “I want to be a medicine man, and all my sons and their sons will inherit my vocation for healing.  I choose to be a doctor.”  From then on, Ramiro was called Dr. Santaella.

Finally, Death summoned the third brother, who had remained at a safe distance, observing and pondering his own choice. “What will it take to change your fate?” asked  Death.  Nicolás did not trust Death. He knew that all material things are paid for dearly.  He asked only that he be allowed to live his life without the interference or help of the dark deceiver.  Death was taken aback. “Everybody wants something” he insisted. But, Nicolas only shook his head.

 “Allow me to go on my way that I may make my own riches on my own time.” Death had to concede and with a swift swing of its hand allowed the youngest brother to go on his way.

After this encounter with the King of Darkness, each brother went his separate way, a hint of a smile on Baldomero’s face, a grin of satisfaction on Ramiro’s; only Nicolás went on with a frown on his face, and a growing crease on his forehead.  

The first brother traveled to Santurce, and, upon settling there opened his cigar factory.  He called it El Cigarro in remembrance of his youth.  The business employed half a dozen workers, who inspired by Baldomero’s story worked steadily and proud. The oldest brother was soon awash in riches.  When the company celebrated its tenth anniversary, the brother discovered that he had cancer.  The long years of smoking and inhaling the toxic perfume had taken a toll on his health.  As his physical condition deteriorated, so did his spirit.  He shunned friends and family.  When his son suggested he retire to take care of his decaying body, he disowned him.  A few years later, breathing barely, and artificially, he would stare out a foggy window in a stark hospital room, and remember his encounter with Death many years ago.

The second brother journeyed to Ponce where he married a good woman with whom he fathered many children.  He was a well-known and respected doctor.  But the long hours of work soon brought unhappiness at home. One day, after a long day at the clinic, which he opened to facilitate his work and bring in more income, he found an empty house and a hastily scribbled note from his wife.  After months of loneliness for his children all grown and busy had little time for him, at age 53, he scrawled a brief message to his children on a prescription pad, and bade Death to meet him on the 9th at 9pm.

And so Death eagerly took the second brother for his own.

The third brother in the meantime made a living for his family and himself by toiling the land.  After years of hard labor and sweat, he built a shabby home, and raised three scruffy children.  All boys.  He often looked at them and remembered his life with his brothers. He also thought long about his choice, and compared his meager existence with the wealth Death had procured his brothers.  However, he had few regrets.  When he celebrated his minetieth birthday, Nicolás returned to the site in which he and his brothers, had encountered death.  The road was overgrown with brush, and the road was barely visible. From a distance, he once again saw the hooded figure slowly gliding forward to meet him. 
“Are you ready?” it said.  Nicholas nodded.  “You took your time.”  The frail man smiled enigmatically.  “How did you survive the others?” In a low raspy voice the old man said, “The quality of a life is not determined by the sufferings and misfortunes you may receive or the wealth and blessings for that matter. It is measured by what you make of the good or bad you receive in life.  I was never a wealthy man, but I meted out much love and much was given to me. I looked at life straight in the face, never longing for what I did not or could not have.  I woke every morning knowing that my life was only mine in the making. At the end of my life I see that life was good to me; my children will shed many a tear for me and my wife will light a candle for the rest of her days to light my journey to the nether land; I meet you now with no pain, no sadness and no regrets.”
Death who holds no grudges and keeps all promises stretched out its bony hand and touched the tattered but wise man’s own, and they, as equals, departed from this life.


The End

My Response to Challenge 3: Succumb

Succumb

Swallow
let it all in, let it
grip your breath, keep it still, keep it in, let it surround
you like mushroom dirt, sweet and wrong, like chloroform masks,
or the physics of a mob, or salmon creeping cold veins. Swallow, again,
let it all in, boxed in larynx, caged in ribs, lungs in the work of succumb,
abuterol hope dissipating, the noise of living -a rasp and choke on the way down. Wait. Slam shut like a refrigerator door. Gulp,till you forget your own name,the reasons for your birth, what they call you as you leave a room,what they all have
you believe about love, your elastic skin,vagabond tongue, epiglottis drunk and full of nonsense. What you thought you knew about breath in a line. Give way,lean,succumb.

Jane Alberdeston

Challenge: Instructions Poem




Challenge #3:

Okay - here goes: Write a 15-line list of instructions on how to love, hate, alienate, admire, exhaust, exacerbate, embarrass, ignite, enamor or seduce, rebel, or reject. Feel free to come up with your own abstraction. It can be 15 lines or less.






Sunday, October 28, 2012

My Father's Shoes

     As I head into my father's room looking for him, I see his old rugged shoes on the floor.  I sit on his bed and stare in awe for I wonder when would I ever fit into his shoes?  When I was a little girl, I couldn't resit the temptation of putting my feet inside his warm shoes.  I guess I was looking for comfort and the reassurance that he was there for me.  At that time, my feet were so much smaller than his that I could barely walk in my father's shoes.  I stumbled and fell many times just to be picked up by him.  Now my father is 81, and his shoes are the only witness of his struggles, love for live and family, perseverance, patience, intelligence and many more amazing qualities that have characterized the incredible human being he is today.  I try his shoes on only to find out that I still don't fit into my father's shoes.  I cry wondering, would I ever fit into his shoes?  Probably not, but what comforts me is tho know that I am part of an amazing man who fits into those old rugged shoes.

Friday, October 26, 2012

For Jane

Included is a poem a wrote a few years ago. Your music-inclusive poetry in the workshop reminded me that I had written this and I wanted to share it with you.


 Sentada en un salón, música full blast echoing in the surrounding space...like being stoned, humos salientes de la cocina ardiente. El fénix rises from the ashes...musica alternative crea una dimensión desconocida hacia los años 90.  Tengo 15 años nuevamente y me encuentro en mi prime... en mi Nirvana...atrapada en la viscocidad del pearl jam...like being stoned, espero por los Foo Fighters que luchen por mi salvación mientras los Stone Temple Pilots me transportan a mi Soul Asylum de hace 10 años.  Y se acaba todo, se acaba la música. ... es otra decada... como George Michaels deseo FREEDOM! Suena a freedom mientras en realidad es el calor ardiente como un Red Hot Chili Pepper que enciende mis entrañas y me pide sweeeet, sweeeet surrender..... take me to the other side, give it away give it away, give it away now baby. SET ME FREE!



Thursday, October 25, 2012

Workshop # 1: Heaven's Plight

Heaven's Plight

I ring the bell here every night. I pull kid's toes, fill them with fright.
I feel I was taken for a fool. I'm not an angel, i'm just a ghoul that's stuck in this place and I wonder Why? I'm stuck with plain tourists, the same dead type.
I was first received here by a guy named Peter, a hippie looking fella. He was the greeter. 
I wondered where in this Heaven there could be a God, but I guess He/ She was hiding between all this fog. 

This being dead business is another routine. I'm just not as famous in the trade as that dude, Guillotine.
At least now I finally get to know my answers...  Like.. Did Santa really have a reindeer named Prancer? 

No, but seriously, I feel like I am torn. Heaven is as sadomasochistic as amateur porn. When I was alive It had a certain allure, now I'm also in training for giving Celestial tours. 

I'm hoping that I will finally get out of the pod, to ask that All Knowing Deity the ultimate though, to please answer my questions when it was my turn.. now that my Earthly remains are stored in an urn. 

"Yes. Anything." He spoke with a nod. "Go on."

I just thought before speaking "Just give me a chance". He sat there. Almighty. He gave me a glance.

Then all just went dark.. and I though.. hold on .. I opened my eyes.. had I just been pushed... on?

WHaaaaaaah! I said and he grinned... 

Whaaaaaahhh! .. no wait a second .. Thats not what I mean. 

Whaaaaaah! I tried again ... No no wait , Hold on..  

He laughed , and he nodded..  he said "Yes my Son?"

To what I replied: What on Earth do you mean!?

he responded: The answer to life is closer than what it seem. 

"Is this just a joke, or is this just a pun? Oh wait NOW I get .No fair! I'm REBORN??!!"





Friday, October 19, 2012

Workshop #1: The Forking Torch


The Forking Torch

So, I walk into the living room of my house, dark, hoping for familiarity. I had just had the worst day. And when I walked in everything was gone… GONE!


Can you believe it ?? Empty, spaciously dusty… un-bleached shadow spots on the carpet and all to accentuate the lack of furniture and decorations. It was ALL  gone.

They took the chairs, the tables... the swing… the dog, the bowls, even the  moldy birthday cake candles from Nana’s 87th  birthday cake, ten years ago… and the sowing box.. and the pins!
 They took everything except a fork. 

 It stood alone, stuck to the floorboards…  mocking me, in the middle of the porch. I wondered what message they tried to convey… Why couldn’t they take the mortgage I had to pay…or a few bills at least??

That’s it! I’ve had it .. Im sick of this town . Everything is going downhill and I will soon drown , of stress, and my family of the dog and my job..  wait no , the dog is gone too.  Oh! my beloved Bob.  Now to top it all off I come home and got robbed??  Geez!

I have decided... I will make this fork my torch. I will carry it with pride ... well at least, put it away from the porch.  It will be my symbol of anger filled incongruous attitude. Because, you know, they freaking left me stuck in dusty solitude.

You filthy thief… you inglorious bastard... I will hide you in a wall and neatly cover it with plaster for, that’s all you are you stinking thief. Someone who likes to steal dirty jock straps, and in return give back grief!

If I ever find you I will burn you with fire… I will unleash upon you my wrath with.. with draconian desire and this will be true. THIS WILL BE TRUE! From the bottom of my heart , I will stick my torch/fork in your  left eye .. and yell FORRRRK YOUUUUUU!

Thursday, October 18, 2012

Challenge 2 (Word Limit) - The Tale of my Three Ancestors


The Tale of my Three Ancestors
 (with apologies to JK Rowling’s “The Tale of the Three Brothers”)

There were once three brothers, who were traveling along a hilly Spanish vineyard at twilight.  In their time, a war erupted from their home country and the Freedom Land in the west, so, being learned in strategies of battle from stories past, they inscribed themselves in the war and traveled to a rural island close to the enemy’s land, only to be left behind by their country after its defeat.

A hooded figure approached the brothers and spoke to them.  The illusive figure identified himself as Death.  He felt angry for being cheated of the only three remaining members of a family meant to be wiped out in the unfortunate byproduct of the war.  But Death was cunning.  He feigned congratulations for the three brothers’ wit and promised a prize for each of them.

So the oldest brother, Baldomero—a bold, drug-abusing man—asked for a factory to produce his own line of cigars.  So Death gave him as he wished.

Then the second brother, Ramiro—a savvy and greedy human—decided that he wanted to humiliate Death still further, and asked for wisdom for him and his descendants to become doctors.  So Death gave him as he wished.

And finally Death asked the third and youngest brother, Nicolás, what he would like. The youngest brother, a humble man, did not trust Death. So he asked nothing of Death but to live a life uninterrupted by any of the dark deceiver’s insidious ploys.  So Death, most unwillingly, swore his first and only Promise of Life to a mere mortal.

After having spoken to all three brothers, Death stood aside and allowed them to continue on their way.  In due course the brothers separated, each for his own destination. The first brother traveled to Santurce, and, upon settling down, he opened his cigar factory and bathed in its riches.  But in time, the brother’s body and spirit rotted, becoming so distant from the real world that he disregarded his deteriorating health and shrugged off his family, including his son, Antonio, who opened a cigar factory in the enemy land

            His memories of the War isolated him further from his son’s open-mindedness, and thus he died alone in a hospital with severe pain from his substance abuse.

And so Death eagerly took the first brother for his own.

Meanwhile, the second brother journeyed to Ponce where he found a wife and fathered many children.  However, in likeness to the second brother’s greed, his wife divorced him for a richer man, and the children became lawyers and doctors of their own and abandoned him, continuing the miserly domino effect.

Finally the second brother, driven mad with loneliness and despair, killed himself to end the bountiful emptiness of wealth he once ignorantly craved in his youth.

And so Death eagerly took the second brother for his own.

But as Death watched the third brother from afar, as promised, he never understood how such a pathetically poor man could enjoy happiness and love in life for his family.  It was only when he had attained a great age that the youngest brother finally greeted Death, reflecting on his so-called accomplishments.  The frail man explained to him as he patiently had done for his own family, “life is not made of the sufferings and turmoil you may unfortunately receive, but what you made of those sufferings that define one’s life.”  And so Death, finally realizing the young man’s purpose, stretched out his bony hand in likeness to the hand of the wrinkled wise man, and they, as equals, departed from this life.
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This is the story of my great-great-grandfather, Nicolás Santaella.

 

A short story by:  Carlos Santaella

Word Count:  596, (not counting supplementary notes below)

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Notes:


1.      NICOLÁS: Spanish form of Latin Nicolaus, meaning "victor of the people."

2.      BALDOMERO*: Spanish name composed of the Germanic elements bald "bold, brave" and meri "famous," hence "bold and famous."

·        http://wtca.philrules.com/home-2/history - his son, Antonio, continued his legacy in Tampa, Florida

                                                              i.      ANTONIO: Italian and Spanish form of Latin Antonius, possibly meaning "invaluable.”  Looked him up, too, and his name fits!

3.       RAMIRO*: Spanish form of Latin Ramirus, meaning "wise and famous."

*(The only confirmed names are Nicolás and Antonio Santaella, the former from a story my father told me and the latter because of my research and that link.  The other two are just speculative fabrications of mine, symbolic representations of the fame and riches the two other brothers so desperately craved in the story.  Their professions and legacies are real, but their personalities are also fabrications of mine.  This story is in no way meant to disrespect them, but meant to teach a moral.)

Tuesday, October 16, 2012


Here's my example. PLEASE CRITIQUE: Beginnings

The stranger came to her as she lay among the cascading rhododendron. The moon was out, though there was no reason for anyone to have found her.Feli was careful not to stumble along the terrain, lessons learned from various surgeries. Feli found being a widow impossible, and became a bit of a daredevil, her friends liked to say. Nepal being the last in a long line of ways to grieve. But among the photos and the wayfarer’s ephemera Feli felt less devil than dare. “Felicia, you keep pushing soon there’ll only be wall left.”

“Don’t you worry none about me, Doc”, Feli thought as she stripped off her Northface jacket; the April chill noticed her, moved her way. She thought she could see Langtang in the distance, but the dark played her for a fool. Behind her she could hear the sounds of people milling and stumbling over benches, tripping over their own excitement as if this were a high school dance, everyone at the pinnacle of joy without having the words to describe it. She pressed on beyond the lamps, ignoring her companions. Tentacles of light reached for her, missed.

She breathed in orchid flush. At first, Feli didn’t see him nearing her. All she saw was the night becoming day. Feli waited but wasn’t surprised.

A crowd gathered between the stillness of the night and her body. Minutes struggled, worked against themselves. The chill picked up inside the sound of the stranger’s breath. Nobody knew where he’d come from. The base camp? The highland? Did Ganesh himself send him, her courier, her orange-scented savior? There was no time to thank him. No time to recall his face, being a shadow against Feli’s flat body. He disappeared into the gloaming. They say he barely touched her lips. He touched her in whispers, her body an ear that heard only him. Before stepping away, he slipped a shred of his yellow collar into her fist, where it sang like a radiator’s kiss.
But everyone know how much people like to embellish -

This year, her closet held a tuxedo shirt with a starch shine that burned her skin like hot Crisco. Between each buttonhole a jasmine flower perched as if freshly plucked. Last year nestled between her pantsuits, a serape,pre-Columbian. A dead warbler fell from its sleeves. Before that, it had been a loin cloth, with frayed edges. Scent of earth and laughter. The first time, after returning to her house in the city, he left her a pair of linen pants. When her hand fell into the pocket, this time overtaken by orange blossom and pine ash. She was no longer tethered. There was never the intention to call the police.

Monday, October 15, 2012

Music of the Orbs


Music of the Orbs

I knew when I woke up that morning that I was not my usual self. The voices in my head told me to act normal. No need to drown them out. They were my only company. England was a new beginning. It was far and contrasting to California. I could be myself here.

I first made an effort to interact with Red, a guy from Indiana. I wanted to break nights like a normal guy, hanging in dorm rooms, hours after curfew. One Saturday night, I walked through town. The stars and planets hovered above me. Students cavorted from club to club in drunken stupor before closing time. I saw Red. The voices told me to discuss the universe with him. His friends acted strange and uncomfortable around me. I mimicked their actions to catch their attention. I tried to play kick the can, but they slowly drifted away. I held the smallest guy’s forearm trying to get him to stay. “Try to take the can from me!” I told him. He did not want to play. One guy rounded up the girls. Two left the other way. They did not care about the universe. Red left too. I stood alone. 

The voices reassured me: “The universe is with you. You are a shining star.”

That morning, I saw the young guy that worked at the dorms. I tagged along. He was innocent, effeminate, shy, friendly. I carried his breakfast tray for him, pulled out his chair so he could sit. I did not mind. I made conversation. The voices approved. I spoke about the universe. He listened. When we finished, I took our trays to the service window. The voices told me he had to work. He left. I was alone again in a crowded room.

“WHAT DO YOU WANT FROM ME?!” I stood shouting in the middle of the courtyard. People on the other side of the gate stopped. Two Italian guys heckled me. I threw my shoes hard and far. The voices inside my head were restless.  They now wanted me to become one with the universe. 

“TAKE ME WITH YOU!” My shouts shook St. Catharine’s walls. I felt desperate and overwhelmed by the organ music coming from the chapel by the dorms.

Sirens. Lights. The gatekeeper held me down. I pushed him. The universe summoned me. The surrounding noise drowned the music of the orbs. Stranger stared, confused.

My English friend held me tightly, stroked my hair. My ragged sobs were buried into his shoulder. He kept me company, until the paramedics took me away.

Now, I am locked in a hospital.   It will be two weeks before I return to California. I open the closet doors and long for normalcy. Familiarity is an ocean away.  There is no mirror, yet I can picture my reflection: Ken, Five foot four. Hair: Black. Eyes: Brown. Asian. The voices are fading and I feel alone.  I will have to prove to THEM that I do not need them. For now, I am stuck with someone else’s clothes... no strings… nothing sharp, in shades of clinical mint… and the drugs.

Sunday, October 14, 2012

Challenge 2: Story: Word Count Limit 500-600 words.

Everyone, I found this prompt while playing in a story prompt generator (sounds absolutely Orwellian, but I like it!). The link to the website, if you'd like to try others, is:

http://www.archetypewriting.com/muse/idea_generators.htm

I loved the idea below. I hope you all enjoy it. And please, feel free to post your own challenges, as you all are authors on this website.

Friday, October 12, 2012

Rosale


Rosale  

Red Patent 9.0
I challenge you to find us!
You stingy little girl.

With us on, your legs were the pillars of the Earth, the columns of Colossus; tall, long and slender, and Oh, so very, very strong.

You would have been the graceful Amazon of every man’s fantasy. 
The Queen of Hearts.
We were the perfect “fuck me” heels. 
Plucked out of adult fairytales.

Shame on you… we hang our Mad Hatter bows in shame.

We stood there on that shelf, raising cherry flags more scarlet than our red patent skin, shouting: “Buy us! Buy us!”

Your girl friends… they understood our language. 
They valued our worth. 
You should have listened to their plea for us. 
Yet you turned away with stubborn steps and deaf ears.

For a second, you tried us on. 
You rose tall and elegant. 
You were tempted by our crimson joy. 
You were mesmerized by our ruby spell. 
You stood there, feminine and miserable.
Torn between reason and desire…

 You should have chosen desire.  

When you wore us, your legs ripped, 
shaped by our support on your toned jogger calves, 
evoking the envy of women around you. 
They tingled with the pleasure of vanity like a post-orgasmic flow.

We zapped you with the energy of sexy soles and spiky 5”heels.
Silly girl... we did not crave freedom. 
We wanted to be servants at your feet and to kiss your every step.

You abandoned us, 
Now, we will haunt you in shades of blush, 
on the feet of other women less deserving of our elegance, 
yet wiser than you, frugal girl.
They chose to spend on self gratification.

 We will haunt your dreams of neglected desires .

 We will become the disturbing reminder of your buried life; 
the one you set aside for alternate choices and ugly or “comfortable” shoes.

WE CHALLENGE YOU to find us again… 
and if you do, 
Maybe then you will open your pocket, 
and finally change your mind.

Thursday, October 11, 2012

Workshop and Critique Etiquette

Everyone, I'm borrowing this handout on "Workshop Etiquette" from another blog called Creative Writing blog because I couldn't have said it any better. These are the rules for etiquette I've found in my other writing groups and ones that other writers use in their groups. So, I believe the handout will be helpful. I'm quoting it from here on in [LINK: http://creative-writing-mfa-handbook.blogspot.com/2010/12/workshop-etiquette.html]:

"You know the old joke about how there's an asshole in every room, so if you look around and you don't see the asshole, it's you? I feel that way about workshops – there's always that one person, right? And it's not that they're rude or ego maniacal or attention-hogging (though that's sometimes part of it), it's mostly that their comments on your work just aren't useful. I once got a comment on a piece that said, "C'mon, Sally Jane, you can do better than this." Or then there was the guy who said, "I mean, it's good and all, but I just don't like it." Or the time a classmate criticized my play (set in Tennessee) because "this kind of thing would never happen in Minnesota." How is that helpful?

The whole purpose of a workshop, whether as part of your MFA program or in an independent writers group, is to help the writer with his/her work and development of craft. My basic rule for any comment is if it's not useful to the writer, then keep it to yourself. Avoid delving into the writer's psychology or personal life ("Your characters are having trouble with their marriage; is this because your own marriage is falling apart?"), and try to remember that just because something is outside your own realm of experience doesn't make its existence impossible.

But don't listen to me. Listen to Meir Ribalow. He runs a playwrights group at The Player's Club in New York City, and he begins every session with a recitation of his rules. I think these rules are genius, and everyone in every workshop on earth should use them. So here they are:

All comments have to be constructive. No trash talking allowed.

You have to comment on the work in front of you, not what you would have written if it had been your idea. Even if you think your idea is better.

No invidious comparisons. Saying "Sophocles did this better" isn't helpful.

Don't try to rewrite for the author. The author can do that him/herself. Just point out the areas of concern.

Wednesday, October 10, 2012

Shoe Challenge: Poem

Please comment. Of course, I didn't meet the line limit. And I had started this poem on a completely different tack and it took this direction. I don't know how I feel about the ending. - Thanks, Jane


Slipper Glass

Babes in toyland, heels stare
back from ledges, full of blush
and fairytale. Adorable.
These will never be shoes.
Built of steel and skin, between sex
and city, they beg, canines
in a wolf's grin, calling on a daughter's shaky
ambition. But oh they are so pretty,
petals in shades of please, puppies
in a shop-window. Take me, take me.
They lie. Shoots dig in,sprouting
and pubescent, deep like a fork's tine,
a jackhammer, a scalpel. All of you blisters.
Still, you auction futures, empty
retirement accounts, pawn good sense.
But like Mellancamp sang,"Come on, baby,
make it hurt so good". Glamour, Vogue,
even Ladies Home Journal, all say
"Fuck Birkenstocks." "Burn all flipflops."
"Hail the heel." Let it be a spike,
flush and plum against the heart,
shrill yet lovely, because what is a girl
without a little blood and tears.

Tuesday, October 9, 2012

My Rendition of the First Challenge - Shoes


“So, You think you Have it Bad, Huh?”
(Hope you enjoy, and comment/critique as you wish)
You think you have it bad; that everything in your life is collapsing around you; and that all that could possibly go wrong in your life, did? Well, I’m here to make you eat those words! What is it that’s so difficult about life as a human being, living free with no restraints, when it’s the things supporting you that truly suffer? No, I’m not your parent or legal guardian; look lower. I’m a stinking shoe.
 
My current master is a dedicated athlete, and being a Nikes sneaker, I was fabricated to withstand much sweat, heat, and pressure. Even though my other half doesn’t mind, what the boneheads who made me, personally, didn’t consider is my emotions. This job is disgusting, physical abuse is reflected by my scratches, dirt marks, or bruises and the hours are all screwed up, depending on this guy’s weird schedule. He also doesn’t shower often, which adds to the pungent musk I’m forced to absorb already. And, just to top it all off—the perfect cherry for this unpleasant sundae—have you ever had to support the weight of somebody with a pus-filled hangnail jammed in your face? Yeah, I didn’t think so; hence, before you complain about your life, consider the ones below you (literally) and be thankful for how good you have it in—oh crap...he’s awake!

 

Shoe Challenge: Confessions of a Spanish Leather Boot


Confessions of a Spanish leather boot

Señorita: The first time I felt your tender, virginal hands upon my firm skin, I wanted to wrap your legs in the finest leather, making you sizzle and sweat as I zipped my way slowly, skyward, inching towards your thighs.

I wanted to feel the weight of your body on me, all day, or all night.

I wanted you to tell me:
“I love the way you look on me.
You make me hurt so good.
You make me feel so sexy.”

I promise, I will firmly hold you by the ankles, our bodies merging slowly step-by-step as I lift you towards the heavens.

Tug and pull me onto you as I then lift you on my pedestal.

Wear me out while I caress your shapely legs and perfect feet.

Make a hole in my sole.

And when we are done, I will walk you safely home down the cobbled stoned alleys of Madrid, bathed in the Spanish sunrise as it increasingly glows illuminating on the growing promise of this new affair.

Monday, October 8, 2012

Shoes


A craving for red shoes

They’re not my shoes.
But they should be.
They’re red, crimson, scarlet, burgundy, or cherry.
They’re bright, shiny, glazed.
Three and a half inch heels.
High, but not crippling.
They stand tall, thin, smooth, erect.
They never strut, they simply slither.
They’re always new, spotless.
They smell of fresh raw leather.
They’re on her feet though, not mine.
But…
They easily glide off her feet.
They slip into mine.
I become…
I am.

elf

Wednesday, October 3, 2012

WORKSHOP MEETING SCHEDULE


WORKSHOP MEETINGS:

FRIDAY, OCTOBER 19th, 1 - 3 PM, RM. 231

SATURDAY, OCTOBER 20th, 9 - 10 AM, Titulo V-231

FRIDAY, NOVEMBER 9th, 1 - 3 PM, MUGS CAFE, Arecibo (across from the police station)

SATURDAY, NOVEMBER 17TH, 9 - 11 AM, EL BUEN MESONERO, on the marginal, top of the hill across from Wendys)

HOLIDAY SESSION/PARTY: FRIDAY, DECEMBER 7, 1 - 2 PM

SHOE CHALLENGE 1 - OCT. 4

CHALLENGE 1:

WRITE 10 SENTENCES ABOUT A SHOE. IT CAN BE THE SHOE YOU ARE WEARING OR YOUR SHOE IN YOUR CLOSET. IT CAN BE YOUR FATHER'S SHOE OR YOUR TEACHER'S SHOE. IT DOESN'T MATTER. IT CAN BE ABOUT YOUR LEFT SHOE OR RIGHT SHOE. BUT YOU MUST BE ABLE TO SEE YOUR SHOE. YOU SHOULD CHALLENGE YOURSELF TO USE CREATIVE, ACTIVE, AND DESCRIPTIVE LANGUAGE. FEEL FREE TO USE PERSONIFICATION OR SYMBOLISM. OPEN YOURSELF TO A PHILOSOPHICAL VIEW OF YOUR SHOE.

My Shoes by Charles Simic

Shoes, secret face of my inner life:
Two gaping toothless mouths,
Two partly decomposed animal skins
Smelling of mice-nests.


My brother and sister who died at birth
Continuing their existence in you,
Guiding my life
Toward their incomprehensible innocence.


What use are books to me
When in you it is possible to read
The Gospel of my life on earth
And still beyond, of things to come?


I want to proclaim the religion
I have devised for your perfect humility
And the strange church I am building
With you as the altar.


Ascetic and maternal, you endure:
Kin to oxen, to Saints, to condemned men,
With your mute patience, forming
The only true likeness of myself.
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